2 Englisch Texte

[Haengebauchschwein]

Hallo mal wieder.

Habe morgen Referat und bitte euch 2 kurze Texte zu lesen und die Rechtschreib- und Grammatikfehler auszubessern, hervorheben...

Macht euch bitte keine Sorgen über den Inhalt, es geht von einem Text aus, mit dem ich selbst nicht ganz übereinstimme.

Danke

Ps: Ich weiß ich bin kein Englisch Genie und bitte euch Kommentare wie "lern Englisch", etc" zu unterlassen.





€dit: Das erste ist ne Aufzählung und kein Text, sry.


1.Crack

History
When crack hit the USA in 1985 it fast became a big problem for the nations.
Also Britons have to worry about a increase of the crime and a high number of cocaine related deaths.
The reason why crack spread so fast is, because it is very cheap and even poor people in the ghettos can afford to consume it.

Consumption & Impact
It is called crack because the small cristals make that sound when you smoke the most addictive drug.
When it is inhaled it hits your brain in a very small amount of time,but after about 40 seconds the effect is already gone.
Crack addicts need to get high more and more often, while the effect is getting lower and lower.

Addiction
If you consume other drugs like cocaine or heroin, it takes serveral months to make an addict out of somebody.
Crack users usually become addicts after smoking only once.

Outcome
Because the drug addicts now need big amounts of crack to satisfy their need and spend all their money on the drug.
That is the point when they become robbers,thiefs and even murderer, because their desire to smoke crack is bigger than anything we could ever imagine.
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Crack first became popular when it hit New York in the middle of the 1980’s. Not only the USA has to deal with the problems, which come up with crack. It is also spreading in the inner cities and the urban hinterland of Britain. It is easy to get to the drug and it is very cheap, so it is not a high society drug like cocaine.

Crack is made out of cocaine,in a simple progress. Everyone in this room would be able to do it. After “cooking” the cocaine, you have small cristals which make a cracking sound when it is smoked in the so called “Crack pipes”. When cocaine gets sniffed or swallowed it takes some time to do make an impact, and it leasts about 30 minutes or more. However when crack is smoked you have an intense feeling of euphoria at the moment you smoke it, but it lasts for only a minute. “The diffrence between snorting cocaine and smking it is like the differencce between firing a pistol and a cannon”.

After some time inhaling the drug you get used to it. Addicts want to back to feeling when they smoked crack for the first time, and consume alot more as they did in the beginning. Although more and more crack is smoked it produces less and less effect. That is exactly the reason why crack is the most addictive drug our society had ever to confront. It is a vicious circle which never stops.

At this point the users are at their most dangerous. They are desperate and depressive, they dont care about anything any more except crack. After they have spend all their savings on crack and traded all valuables just to get high another time, they explode into wild animals trying satisfy their need. Normal people are transformed into criminals who only think about smoking crack.

 

[LazyNazgul]

Ich nehm an das ist in der Form völlig auf deinem Mist gewachsen? Also keine Übersetzung oder so sondern quasi was du aus diversen Quellen so zusammenschustert hast?

Will dir ja nicht völlig den Mut nehmen aber da find ich in praktisch jedem Satz nen Fehler oder zumindest schlechtes Englisch.
Evtl hab ich später mal Zeit und Muße mich dran zu setzen denn da is echt ne ganze Ecke Arbeit nötig

 

[SonnyCrockett]

Edit: LazyNazgul wird´s korrigieren

gl beim referieren,
mfg

SonnyCrockett

 

[Haengebauchschwein]

Ich nehm an das ist in der Form völlig auf deinem Mist gewachsen? Also keine Übersetzung oder so sondern quasi was du aus diversen Quellen so zusammenschustert hast?

Will dir ja nicht völlig den Mut nehmen aber da find ich in praktisch jedem Satz nen Fehler oder zumindest schlechtes Englisch.
Evtl hab ich später mal Zeit und Muße mich dran zu setzen denn da is echt ne ganze Ecke Arbeit nötig

Du sprichst zwei Dinge an die ich bereits erwähnt habe.

1. Das ganze bezieht sich auf einen Text, vom Lehrer vorgegeben.

2. ICH BIN KACKE IN ENGLISCH

 

[Sprotte]

1.Crack

History
When crack hit the USA in 1985 it quickly became a big problem for the nation.
Also the British have to worry about an increase of the crimerate and a high (evtl besser: rising?) number of cocaine related deaths.
The reason why crack spreads so fast is that it is very cheap and even poor people in the ghettos can afford consuming it.

Consumption & Impact
It is called crack because the small crystals make that sound when you smoke this most (evtl besser "highly") addictive drug.
When it is inhaled it hits your brain very quickly, but after about 40 seconds the effect is already gone.
Crack addicts need to get high more and more often, while the effect is getting lower and lower.

Addiction
If you consume other drugs like cocaine or heroin, it takes serveral months to make an addict out of you.
Crack users usually become addicts after smoking it only once.

Outcome
Because the drug addicts now need big amounts of crack to satisfy their need, they spend all their money on the drug.
That is the point when they become robbers, thiefs and even murderers, because their desire to smoke crack is bigger than anything we could ever imagine.
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2.
Crack first became popular when it hit New York in the middle of the 1980’s. Not only the USA has to deal with the problems which come up with crack. It is also spreading in the inner cities and the urban hinterland of Britain. It is easy to get [to] the drug and it is very cheap, so it is not a high society drug like cocaine.

Crack is made out of cocaine in a simple process. Everyone in this room would be able to do it. After “cooking” the cocaine, you have small crystals which make a cracking sound when they are smoked in the so called “Crack pipes”. When cocaine gets sniffed or swallowed it takes some time to cause an impact, and it lasts about 30 minutes or more. However, when crack is smoked you have an intense feeling of euphoria at the moment you smoke it, but it lasts for only a minute. “The diffrence between snorting cocaine and smoking it is like the differencce between firing a pistol and a cannon”.

After inhaling the drug for some time you get used to it. Addicts want to get the feeling again after they smoked crack for the first time, and consume alot more as they did in the beginning. Although more and more crack is smoked it produces less and less effect. That is exactly the reason why crack is the most addictive drug our society has ever had to confront. It is a vicious circle which never stops.

At this point the users are the most dangerous. They are desperate and depressive, they don't care about anything any more except for crack. After they have spent all their savings on crack and traded all valuables just to get high another time, they turn into wild animals trying to satisfy their need. Normal people are transformed into criminals who only think about smoking crack.

Ich erhebe keinen Anspruch auf Korrektheit und/oder Vollständigkeit der Korrektur

 

[Haengebauchschwein]

Fettes Dankeschön.

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